Fire Light

Hmm... umm... confusing? OK, to be frank, it needs some work. It was kinda confusing the was that Ubi is Japanese, the letter was written in kanji, wo was going ...

Hmm... it was pretty good. Aside from what Jabberhut and Azila said, when you said "The arrow pierced the bucks hide," you might want to make "buck's hide", and when ...

Hmm... an interesting piece of poetry, to say the very least. There isn't too much to say to fix this poem, except that, (as MyrddinDerwydd pointed out,) seamstresses probably be ...

Hmm... it was very Interesting. Like Ayra, you had some difficult word for 12 year olds, but most of the other members are 13 or older, so don't worry about ...

Umm... Youth With Splinters? Yeah, You Will Suffer does sound like a good choice, but i like being defiant. XD Anyway, Youth=young, young writers society, With=also, including, also, with, and ...

Hmm... very creative. Finally, a Metroid fanfic! XD It was confusing at times, but it was pretty good aside form that. Although when you said "It went into a berserk.", ...

hmm... it was alright. As everyone else who reviewed, it WAS kinda flat. As my reading/l.a. teacher would say, "Show, don't tell (it's boring), show, don't tell (it's boring.)" You ...

hmm, contrary to what you said, it was pretty decent. Like Buublwrapped said, the If only got kinda dull, but the fact that it started each stanza made it a ...

uh... (this won't count as a review, will it?) what exactally happened here? the author deleted the post? the account?something?

Hmm, very interesting. You wrote "Hi, It's me, the one who took your sanity." That line was probably the best line in the poem. All in all it was very ...

Hmm... interesting. Fisher just picked this post apart, so this should help a bit. ;] But like Blackstorm said, "Good enough for some face to face interaction" does need a ...

Hmm... it was pretty good, though Snoink has a good point: you could have mentioned more about Anna. At least mention more specifically why she was running. Besides that it ...

Hmm... not too graphic. i can't say it was the best, but i can't say it was the worst. That last part, "I could have made her fly again", was ...

It blows, Like a stream of water, down a valley. Catching my hair, Whenever it flows. Where it stops, I'll never know. Back to were it came from, A hillside, ...

Hmmm... pretty interesting. The last line, "...and sleep comes rushing down.", that was somewhat, off, shal we say. If you switch the second and third stanza around, it would make ...